作者姓名：谭 越 辅导老师：龙艳琪
Everyone has his dream. Chinese dream is to achieve national prosperity. I also have my own dream. I love reading science books like The World of Mystery, Dinosaur World . I also like watching some science programs on TV. I find they are very interesting. So my dream and my ideal is to be a scientist when I grow up, because scientists can lead people to explore the unknown mystery.
In order to make my dream come true, I make a decision. From now on, I will do this. Firstly, reading science books and watching science and education programs. Secondly, I must work hard to be an excellent student. Thirdly, I will insist my dream and never give up half way.
I know that Rome was not built in a day. I believe that after my hard work, one day I can achieve my dream. If you want to be loved, you should learn to love. So I believe as I love science, it will love me, too.
点评：本文开篇由普遍到特殊，由大到小，以中国梦引出个人的科学梦。但作者并没有仅仅停留在梦想上，下文继续为实现梦想制定了计划，结尾段以谚语自勉。全文结构紧凑而又自然，内容充实，富有哲理。有些句子成分过于臃肿，应削减。如unknown mystery 中的unknown 应减去。
